Talk:Chapter 1 Do or Die (Fireheart318)/@comment-26205391-20150315172451

Pretty good, fireheart. I'm what people call a natural-born writer/reader, so I have some comments. First of  all, I like the Pheonix remnant, and I applaud you for finding loopholes in the great illumination.( There shouldn't BE any loopholes, though.) You kinda streched the loopholes, though. Fights on CHI day? If before the illumination it was rare, now it should be non-existant. But all in all,  a  great first chapter, like author of survival said. I'll also add my share of  Fanfics for Chima.